The next big Craze!...Commercial

Hello, since I'm just getting started here and I have yet to establish any working relationships....I'm almost forced to make this blog advertising in it's nature. I recently signed up with one of Arizona's premier lending institutions as a "birdog"  so if you are in need of a commercial loan even a huge one, let me know and I will help as much as I can. And as long as you are here, would you do me a favor ?. Read the ad below and let me know what you think...be brutal if you like as long as I end up with an appealing ad that I can place anywhere                           
                        
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Are you in need of a large commercial loan?
Banks are not lending, We are! Hello, My name is Ron Alexander and I am a commercial loan originator and I can help you gain unmatched Access to Commercial Capital.
 As your agent,I can provide you with  access to a global network of some 500 active sources of commercial capital, with billions of dollars available to deploy across the capital stack.
 
Do you need $500,00.00 to 25 million or MORE for your startup, renovation, new construction,equipment purchases,acquisition,consolidation, etc.,etc.? If it's a solid concept we can get it funded.....take a look at the website for further information..... http://unlimitedfunding.stardate1.com .....if you have questions, you can reach me at ....
 
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          P.S. would you also include you suggestions as to where to run the ad when it's "polished" ?