My UF College Essay

Well, I decided college would be something that would be a wise investment in the future. Not because the numbers make sense, but because there is an experience that can only be learned from interacting with people. 

My main career as an Investor will only make this experience even more enjoyable.

So without further ado, here's my college essay. Any feedback will be greatly appreciated. It also provides a bit more in depth description of how I started all this investing nonsense. 

Topic:  In the space provided, please write a concise narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community. You may want to reflect on your ideas about student responsibility, academic integrity, campus citizenship or a call to service.

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The summer before my freshman year of high school, I officially launched my online business. My friends were all searching for ways to make money and the only way they had engrained in their minds was to find a job, usually making minimum wage. For me, that wasn’t even an option. Because of my legal status in the country, companies couldn’t hire me even if they wanted to, so I was forced into finding a way to make my own money. Out of necessity, I broke out of the typical way of thinking and took on the entrepreneurial mindset.

I started selling various goods on eBay, Craiglist and other similar websites. My inventory initially consisted of video games, simple jewelry, and iPod cases. Never did I expect it to grow to include small motorcycles, kid’s shoes, ATV’s, sunglasses, paintball guns, and designer handbags. At one point, I had Coach, Prada, and Michael Kors packed to the ceiling in my closet.

The winter of my first year in business, I took a calculated risk, mustered up all my courage, and invested all the capital I had saved up in my short lifetime on an online store building software. Thus, SuperPocketBikesX18.com was born. What a life changing birth it was. I became your typical teenage investor, studying hard during school hours, doing homework, finishing projects, and distributing mini-motorcycles across the United States and Caribbean on my free time.

Not everything was success and fortune for me. Soon after SuperPocketBikesX18.com’s conception, my father lost his job and keeping and growing my business became an ever more important aspect of my life. There was no such thing as after-school extra-curricular activities. I had phone lines ringing and inboxes to read, not to mention that customs agent in the Port of Miami I needed to meet with. I once dreamed selfishly of being able to buy the nicest clothes and newest shoes every week. I was making more than enough to buy all that I wanted, but my father losing his job now required all the money made from my business to pay for mortgage, groceries, and utilities. Selfish desires had to wait. My first responsibility as a human being was to take care of the ones I loved.

So I bring to your campus my assortment of skills. The ability to lead, communicate, organize, and create – skills required to start and run a successful business. Ultimately, I give unto my campus an entrepreneurial mindset to inspire my peers to go out and succeed, for failure was never an option for me. Consider me a problem solver. If failure is the problem, then I help my peers succeed – at UF, work, and in life.

I once was a little kid, running through the UF hallways, trick-or-treating through the dorms, playing on the school computers all while my father studied for his degree. That little kid is now ready to attain a UF degree of his own and enter the business world fully equipped. 

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