To the admins, I wasn't spamming.

[Gregory Phillips]

I sent my elevator pitch as a message response while attempting to connect with local investors. I was flagged for spamming. Here is the elevator pitch 

Hello, I am a Business Development Specialist for Konig Enterprises Group. We provide Real Estate services in a multitude of different ways. From Real Estate and Business Funding to Business Developing collaborative endeavors. We also provide Innovative, cutting edge, digital products and Consulting Services. We are an Investing One Stop Shop.

I wasn't trying to spam just throw  an intro out there to network. The message said that I had to speak to an admin. Can I get back to connecting? I'll modify my volumous approach. 

[Gregory Phillips]

Quote from @Scott Mac:

Quote from @Gregory Phillips:

I sent my elevator pitch as a message response while attempting to connect with local investors. I was flagged for spamming. Here is the elevator pitch 

Hello, I am a Business Development Specialist for Konig Enterprises Group. We provide Real Estate services in a multitude of different ways. From Real Estate and Business Funding to Business Developing collaborative endeavors. We also provide Innovative, cutting edge, digital products and Consulting Services. We are an Investing One Stop Shop.

I wasn't trying to spam just throw  an intro out there to network. The message said that I had to speak to an admin. Can I get back to connecting? I'll modify my volumous approach. 

If you said that to me on an elevator (or anywhere it would go in one ear and out the other).

Do you normally talk that way - in newsreader type paragraphs--if so it may work for you.

If not, maybe try recording it on your cell phone and playing it back in your own words until it sounds natural to you.

Hi I'm Greg (from Chicago)---I'm (whatever it is a Business Development Specialist does (???) ie. We lend on Real Estate Deals, it's a good job, I enjoy it. I get to talk to a lot of interesting successful people. Sometimes we partner up with other people too. What do you do?

^^^^^Something like that would (to me) be a lot more memorable, and probably get your Business Card in my Rolodex (I actually use a CRM) vs the more newscaster speech.

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