Probate Lettet Critique

[James Peoples]

After writing 4-5 probates yellow letter. I feel I've finally composed one that's a winner. It consist of the all the letters I've written. Here it goes

Dear ______,

My name is ______ ______ and I'm interested in purchasing house located at (address). I'm sure at this time the property may not be a priority of the family but if you do decide to sell please call me and allow me the chance to make an offer.

I can purchase the house 'As Is' so you won't have to fix anything up or make any repairs. I'll buy with cash and close quickly. Please understand you don't have to wait until probate is completed to sell the property.

If you wish to discuss this further, please contact me at XXX-XXX-XXXX. I'm sure I can make you a fair offer.

In any event, I wish you peace and solace in days ahead.

Sincerely,

______ ______

All feed backs are welcome

[Rick H.]

Are you mailing this version now? Response rate?

One thing you might consider is changing the word "offer" to proposal. My bias is that offer sounds like I'm bidding and I'm adverse to auctions as a buyer. Just my quirky preference. Testing counts more than my opinion.

Also, consider a sequence of letters, each having a particular USP and appeal.

I like to tell people to save my letter, too, because things change and, yes, circumstances do change. And people call me on old letters.

Lastly, offer to be helpful with no strings attached. You'll learn lots and be the ultimate insider, and that's where the money's made.